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What does concrete and emotional mean?
Well it is easier to start by saying what it
doesn’t mean. It doesn’t mean writing a message like:
“Tesco are cutting prices”
This message is vague and lacks personality
Compare this to
“Tesco wine, price crash, save 15%”
Which one would you respond to?
The second one is more powerful because it is
concrete by saying wine and save 15% plus it has emotion by saying price crash.
Overall it is also specific rather than been vague and generic.
It is a sad fact but most marketing messages are
more like the first example and have business jargon added in to try and impress
the reader.
The following is a real example of a message that
I got recently from a company trying to sell me a server.
“If you don’t take up this offer, your competition
will and they will reduce their costs by more than you”
Aghh!
Let’s see if I can improve on this:
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1 |
Don’t miss out on this offer, it
will make your business more efficient
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2 |
Don’t miss out on this offer, it
will make your accountant happy
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3 |
Your accountant will strut into
your annual meeting and proudly announce that you have reduced
your overheads by 7% just by taking up this offer
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Which one is both emotional and concrete and which
one would you respond to?
So there you have it, the
first and one of the most important lessons in writing effective copy
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